SPELL AND GRAMMAR CHECK AND REvISE AND WIN TEN POINTS?

first...change any numbers into words such as 5 to five. second...instead of using colons(:) use quotation marks before and after someone talks. Third..don't but the naration in paraenthesis just put them there. Start a new paragraph everytime someone different talks. Make sure you have question marks and exclamation points in the correct places. Make sure you have end marks period. I hope this helped.